Wednesday, September 30, 2009

Zipper

He was visiting. An odd word to describe coming home. We were preparing to go for a walk.

Standing in the middle of an enormous foyer, I struggled to zip up my brown corduroy coat. The hood's white fur lining making me an Eskimo. The zipper was a challenge to chubby, three year old hands. Angry hands. Hands that didn't want to be stuffed into pom-pomed mittens. Hands that didn't want to hold a stranger's hand.

"Hey little bit, let me help you with that." His voice boomed in our lady house.

"No. I can do it." I turned away. I wouldn't cry for him.

Zip please zip please zip please zip please

She floated down the grand staircase, a movie star in boudoir clothes. I could smell her before she rounded the bend at the landing. I looked into her face. Into the smile my presence couldn't paint. His smile. "Help me?" I asked her.

He grabbed me, and harshly zipped up my coat. He held my wrist and took me for that walk god damn it let your mother rest.

And I was too little to know they were trying. To angry to feel the love.

"You killed the Eskimo." I said.

33 comments:

  1. I got a lump in my throat on this one.

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  2. Visual, zippy, quick-paced. A great introduction.

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  3. Is this a memory? So visceral! And as poignant as your writing always is.

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  4. My heart ached for that little child...so little to understand anything other than than she wanted her mother.....at 3 or 63 there are times in our life where we still want our mother........:-) Hugs

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  5. I am going to venture a guess and say this is a memory rather than a snippit from your work. It's a great image. Sad, tragic, but meaningful.

    and, been looking for a certain e mail this week....

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  6. HI ALL! Sorry for the confusion! This is just a little prose. A memeory. No WIP right now. They are all DONE!!!!!!!!!

    Tess: Around 5pm my time!

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  7. poor little-bit she makes my heart hurt but she knows what she wants so it's gonna be all right

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  8. A very visual piece, I could see the little one, looking up a curved staircase.

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  9. I'm with Tere. This is visceral. Cuttingly deep and bittersweet intensity. You are an artist, Suzanne. How you amaze me.

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  10. I have goosebumps. Sad, but beautiful.

    ...Um, what do you mean they are all DONE!!!? You're finished revisions???

    If so, congratulations!!! *I'm totally breakdancing in your honor*
    If not...er, well, this is awkward.

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  11. YEP!
    Done.

    Sending final drafts to betas TONIGHT!

    (Have a request for a full already from a knee jerk query.) wheee!!! Here we go again!

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  12. Suzanne, you can win a contest with this one!

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  13. What I loved most was the point of view of a child, so bent on doing something in that impetuous childlike manner, and yet so mature as to recognize the difference in the smile.

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  14. Hey! Very nice. That's all. You know the rest. :D

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  15. His voice boomed in our lady house.

    I loove that sentence!

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  16. This is beautiful, Suzanne. Makes me really excited to turn on my Kindle..

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  17. Congrats on your wip completion and the full request! What a poignant memory.

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  18. Beautiful Suzanne. Your words are beautiful. Love that last line. 'You killed the Eskimo." Oh. My heart...

    Congrats on that request for a full :) PLEEEEAAASEE keep us updated. I think of you and your writing often. I am so hoping to hear that you have an agent one day really soon :)

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  19. How you can make us feel so many emotions in just a few paragraphs is beyond me -- beautiful.

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  20. Love the writing!..cheers, Roan.

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  21. Oh yay!!! The breakdance continues then. Good luck with the betas and that full. Fingers crossed for you!

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  22. Fantastic!!! Love your work..as usual!

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  23. That was a beautifully written memory.Moving.
    I came over here via Mimi's blog and I am so pleased that I did.

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  24. i really enjoy your writing style. it speaks to me.

    left you a blog award today on my blog...enjoy your weekend!

    jeannie
    Where Romance Meets Therapy

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  25. This was beautiful. I love that your writing makes me want to ask you a million questions. I just started reading your blog and look forward to getting inspiration from your words. Lovely!

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  26. This is so powerful.
    Your descriptions really sing to the reader- me!
    I'm delighted you've had a request for a "full"- fingers crossed for you.

    I've put a post about your new "Weekend Winners" over at mine, hope that's ok and doesn't put on the pressure. I just loved POTD, and was so happy when you said you'd do it once a week.

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