I hate this. Oh boy. Why do I always forget that I hate choosing? But choose I must because I've made my bed and now.... yada, yada, yada.
The winner: Simon C. Larter
Mandy and I agreed (our seconds were different though!)
Why: The use of the lines. The top coat and wispy hair and candy in the pocket. Uncle George just... well he got us. And the use of Far Rockaway. I feel Simon did a ton of research. If I'm wrong Simon, just keep it to yourself. Email me your address and gift card preference and I will mail it out this week.
Okay, so if you would allow an un agented, un published writer a bit of an opinion corner, I have something to say to all the other entrants:
Justsomethoughts: We loved it! We wanted MORE!
Wym: Clean, concise. Fantastic and sarcastic. (in a good way). I'm a fan.
glnroz: I LOVED this story. I feel like it needs to be a chapter of a larger book! A chapter in your online work? Hmmmmmm.......“Dang Mona, you beat all I ever seen.”Was my favorite sentence out of all the entries.
Liza: Hey. You. *I'm knocking on your forehead* this is a BOOK! Not a short. Take this and use it as an outline. Oh my goodness the characters. You have a start point. A launching pad. I triple dog dare you to make a novel out of it!
Sharon: This too, a bigger story than can live just here. That notebookesque ending? Fantastic.
Sarah: I'm not allowed to let you win. It would be nepotism. I love you too much. And the people at the beach? You painted them the best. And the ghost? You know how I love ghosts.
LFG: So close. I am a huge fan of the dark. This was by far the meanest (and I mean that in a good way) entry. Again, I'd love to see this as a book.
Did I miss anyone? I hope not. Thanks to all for participating. I loved reading all of them. Truly.
I'm a little weepy now. So I'm off to write some more weepy scenes in my newest weepy novel.