Tuesday, November 10, 2009

First line last line contest Winner!

I hate this. Oh boy. Why do I always forget that I hate choosing? But choose I must because I've made my bed and now.... yada, yada, yada.

The winner: Simon C. Larter

Mandy and I agreed (our seconds were different though!)

Why: The use of the lines. The top coat and wispy hair and candy in the pocket. Uncle George just... well he got us. And the use of Far Rockaway. I feel Simon did a ton of research. If I'm wrong Simon, just keep it to yourself. Email me your address and gift card preference and I will mail it out this week.

Okay, so if you would allow an un agented, un published writer a bit of an opinion corner, I have something to say to all the other entrants:

Justsomethoughts: We loved it! We wanted MORE!
Wym: Clean, concise. Fantastic and sarcastic. (in a good way). I'm a fan.
glnroz: I LOVED this story. I feel like it needs to be a chapter of a larger book! A chapter in your online work? Hmmmmmm.......“Dang Mona, you beat all I ever seen.”Was my favorite sentence out of all the entries.
Liza: Hey. You. *I'm knocking on your forehead* this is a BOOK! Not a short. Take this and use it as an outline. Oh my goodness the characters. You have a start point. A launching pad. I triple dog dare you to make a novel out of it!
Sharon: This too, a bigger story than can live just here. That notebookesque ending? Fantastic.
Sarah: I'm not allowed to let you win. It would be nepotism. I love you too much. And the people at the beach? You painted them the best. And the ghost? You know how I love ghosts.
LFG: So close. I am a huge fan of the dark. This was by far the meanest (and I mean that in a good way) entry. Again, I'd love to see this as a book.

Did I miss anyone? I hope not. Thanks to all for participating. I loved reading all of them. Truly.

I'm a little weepy now. So I'm off to write some more weepy scenes in my newest weepy novel.



  1. Congrats to Simon!

    Weepy novel, huh? I'm all kinds of curious about that.

  2. Yea Simon!! Congrats! Thanks Suzy! This was SOOOOO fun!

  3. Thanks, Suzy!

    I'm glad you liked my Uncle George. I became surprisingly attached to him, somehow. I feel bad the way things ended up for him, but I couldn't find any emotional resonance in the last line if George was still around. *sigh*

    I appreciated the prompts, too. It's hard for me to pass up a challenge, so this one was fun to figure out.

    I really liked the other entries, too. It just goes to show that if you put a bunch of creative people in a box, they'll all find a different way out of it!

  4. Great entries! Nice work everyone! Hopefully next time we won't be in the midst of dismembering our WIP so we can participate.

  5. Congrats Simon!

    It was fun and thanks for the encouragement. That was the first creative writing I've ever done that I've ever let anybody read.

    Can't wait for the next opportunity. Maybe I'll keep working on this one.

  6. Congrats, Simon!!

    Suzy, thank you for hosting such a great contest! You know I love you too...wait, I may even have said that in my entry. Darn my suck-uppage.;)

    P.S. I added the ghost touch just for you.

  7. I just re-read all the entries. Good work, all!

  8. Great contest. Just stumbled upon it, but great work by all!

  9. What a fun contest! congrats to the winner!

  10. Congrats Simon, and to ALL others. A fine lot of solid storytellers, you are. And, thanks to you Ms. Suzanne(ah) for taking on such a hard task that was so much fun to others.

  11. Congratulations Simon. Excellent story!

    I loved participating. It's great to have your feedback Suzy. I'd love even more of it! This was fun.

    PS Since I'm venturing out more and more into the virtual world, I changed my user name.

  12. weepy scenes in a weepy novel? sounds perfect for cuddling up on a cold, winter evening. good luck w/ nano!

  13. Nice job, everyone! Cool stories, cool contest, most superb hostess.

  14. Well done, Simon! Sorry I didn't get to this, Suzy. I did want to. Maybe you'll have another contest in the not so distant future.

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